https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zc4GK6c-f38
Saturday, June 4, 2016
Elevator Pitch No. 1
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Content wise I think this was a great pitch. For the next elevator pitch though, I would recommend memorizing the pitch instead of having it written down, I feel like you were disconnected from the audience having to go back to the paper. This will also save some time because you were a few seconds over the 90 second mark. I would also suggest varying your inflection more when you speak. This will engage your audience more and show more emotion.
ReplyDeleteGreat idea! The content of the pitch flows very nicely. I would also recommend memorizing the pitch though. When you know what you're talking about and don't have to read it off a piece of paper, you're audience will be more engaged. I think you did a good job for round 1 though.
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ReplyDeleteI have to agree with Chris. Your idea is salient, but your pitch could use some adjustments. Your tone of voice was a bit monotone and slow causing me to lose focus quickly. Think Billy Mays. I would also suggest memorizing the script and maintaining solid eye contact with the audience.
Jeff, constructively, I would like to encourage you to practice your pitch. I think your idea is wonderful, but I do think that you should include some of your charisma and underlying energy in your tone. Body language and vocals are a huge component in relaying the passion behind your idea, and how to effectively sell your pitch. Rehearsal and confidence is everything. If you could detach from the script I think that would be a great first step towards a cleaner pitch. :-)
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